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Dane DeLucchi
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LiteraryWho
People live such complicated lives.
Anyway, for who's who across the different time periods, I assume Finn/Fiona is the central character, then Charles, Vercin, and Shannon are all just other friends they've had at certain points. I'm also assuming each of them is real, especially Charles, otherwise I'm totally lost, lol.
The decision to do this entirely in dialogue is always a bold move, and I think you made it work alright. I've dabbled a little with the technique, and it's a fun challenge. It also is fitting given the rather philosophical nature of your writing, though it does tend to be a bit heavy handed. That's not at all helped by the periodic blocks of monologue, though maybe sometimes things can only ever be said in a heavy handed way? idk, I don't really have anything to say myself, lol.
I'm also gonna assume that there's more to this story, but for now, these are my thoughts.
PikeyPaige
Thank you for your ever-insightful feedback!
Damn!
I thought I invented using dialogue only to drive a plot.
The characters are all real and there is more to come. It’s a full length novel, or, will be.
I am posting as I finish each chapter but the story is mapped out and there’s an ending.
I was on the fence about the long monologues but it illustrates Fiona’s personality.
Ive wondered what something like like the Tao-Te Ching or Mediations would like like with a plot.